a fairytale
so sorry this place had deaded quite a bit haha. time to revive it now. but i might neglect it again once term 3 draws to an end. eoys v impt! im not gg to let myself screw up again. 100% effort!! then can get A1. nothing less than that.
k in order to compensate the lack of posts for so long:
a fairytale
The gold cover attracts you
take it off the shelf
and skim though its pages
a blur of text
Plot. Themes. Characters
All lumped together.
A prince in shining armour
dashing through the woods
think vines with thorns
malicious crows and cunning foxes
an eagle swops down
carries off a prey
Giants, ogres, dragons
spewing fire
a damsel in distress
awaits in the tower.
so carefully protected
A treasure chest with layers of locks.
Finally the last key.
The last lock.
A soft click and apprehension draws
the top creaks open...
Empty.
secret so securely guarded
not a treasure
but the lack of it.
Top 10 things you'll only know if you're an nco:
1) Being a cadet is much much better than an nco
2) how messy and full of prehistoric stuff the sj rm is :s
3) how high ultimately is ur self discipline coz the only one to ensure that standard is urself
4) the real standard of the corp
5) how responsible u and ur squad can be.
6) the sense of achievment when you and ur squad single-handedly plan e whole sj camp and carry it out successfully =)
7) ur own mistakes when you see then reflected off ur juniors and cadets
8) the imptance of cadet-nco barrier and how to be cruel to maintain it
9) the relief yet weird feeling of passing on ur duties to our nxt successor
10) how you'll really miss sj when you're no longer part of it.
k in order to compensate the lack of posts for so long:
a fairytale
The gold cover attracts you
take it off the shelf
and skim though its pages
a blur of text
Plot. Themes. Characters
All lumped together.
A prince in shining armour
dashing through the woods
think vines with thorns
malicious crows and cunning foxes
an eagle swops down
carries off a prey
Giants, ogres, dragons
spewing fire
a damsel in distress
awaits in the tower.
so carefully protected
A treasure chest with layers of locks.
Finally the last key.
The last lock.
A soft click and apprehension draws
the top creaks open...
Empty.
secret so securely guarded
not a treasure
but the lack of it.
Top 10 things you'll only know if you're an nco:
1) Being a cadet is much much better than an nco
2) how messy and full of prehistoric stuff the sj rm is :s
3) how high ultimately is ur self discipline coz the only one to ensure that standard is urself
4) the real standard of the corp
5) how responsible u and ur squad can be.
6) the sense of achievment when you and ur squad single-handedly plan e whole sj camp and carry it out successfully =)
7) ur own mistakes when you see then reflected off ur juniors and cadets
8) the imptance of cadet-nco barrier and how to be cruel to maintain it
9) the relief yet weird feeling of passing on ur duties to our nxt successor
10) how you'll really miss sj when you're no longer part of it.
posted by C~~~@ at 6:03 AM
5 Comments:
Celia!
As promised, here's my feedback on your poem.
I think it means so much on so many different levels. However, I'll stick to my own interpretation yeah -does the lit student thing-
I think the first stanza is a meaningful metaphor for things that dazzle us ( the word "gold") and perhaps, even entice us, so that we get trapped in our fairytale world. Plots, themes characters could possibly be all the complex things we are forced to analyse as we grow older ( as students)
The next 2 paras show the darker side of fairytales in a way, but as you said, it's not too negative. Just gives a little twist to the conventional fairy tale.
the last para is my fave! it's so quoteworthy :DD very suspenseful. And yes, this shows that you have structure okay! :)) "not a treasure, but the lack of it" this reminds me of art, i don't know much, but it's like empty space. what is not there is as important as what is there. there's a sense of ambiguity.. is the treasure really as good as it is mesmerising? It links back to the first stanza.
All in all, poetry is magic! Esp this poem :) It takes talent to make your readers think about possible ideas in many ways and be able to justify them. This poem is seriously good enough for unseen poetry analysis ! Great job.. and I think that your writing style has matured. Yes, i've read some previous poems of yours, which were really good too. yay continue writing poetry which i will faithfully read and update the book yeah! :DD Love!
yay! thanx kyna for interpreting it =) it's cool how pple see amazing stuff that sometimes e writer can't even see.
haha what old poems did u read?? some v yuck u know haha i read again i feel goosebumps one haha but i think i nv post those =)
did u read e one on identity? e mirror one?
hello
oh sorry i was just testing out the previous message. i wanted to say..
TAN YEE LIN IS VERY SLOW : D cos she cannot understand your poem!
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Hey but i understand now!
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that's because I TOLD HER! :D
BYEBYE
haha hi eileen and yeelin =). eh nvm, quite used to slow pple. (points at poor steffi hehe) jkjk.
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